Friday, 12 September 2014

The house Springlily

WALT :Use varied sentence beginnings and lengths.
I think I did well with not using dilapidated and not much and’s.I think I need to improve on not using that much coma’s.


The weather beaten, bleached weatherboards slouched as the wind blew, the room’s had a permanent aroma of dampness,the wallpaper had long given up clinging to the wall, broken glass was everywhere , Our house had a disgusting sense of smell, A broken down  car was parked sat on the porch  ,Our floor was cold,damp. Our walls on our rented house were stained with red paint.
                                          

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